In
the article “The Dangers of Reality TV,” the author, Timothy Sexton, indicates
the negative consequences of“Reality TV” to young generations. Reality TV sends
the wrong perception of views in life which directs young generations to the
wrong ways. According to the dangerous messages from Reality TV, living in
society becomes a competition in engaging with each other, image becomes more
important than ability. What’s more, it also states that education is
completely useless in succeeding our dreams.
I
believe that education is the power of human resource, because education gains
our knowledge to make our life wealthy. Additionally, with wealthy knowledge,
we can also achieve our goals. Several evidences are addressing below.
According
to the research from “Money” magazine, in average people who have bachelor
degree have $35,000 income per year. In contrast with $25,000 of people who
hold high school diploma. Obviously, the level of education plays an important
role in succeeding in this competitive society. With the development of
socialization, we have entered 21st century. The 21st
century is a period of education and technology. For instance, the successes of
Apple Company and Microsoft have demonstrated the importance of education. Many
employees of these successful companies have high education background. With education,
we would have infinite creativities to make our dreams happen.
What’s more, education not only
gives us money but a way to gain our soul. A wise person once said that
education is the power of human resource. I strongly agree with this opinion. Life
is not always like the way we expected, we may fail ourselves after encountered
difficulties. However, we would realize that we actually grow up and become
stronger after failures. As an example from the famous scientist Tomas Edison,
he has failed thousand times of examinations before he eventually invented the
light bulb, which is the most well-known and useful invention in modern world. He
believed that one cannot succeed his or her goals in one step. Therefore, the
opinion from reality TV about the obsolescence of education is non-sense and
incorrect. The real purpose of education is to teach people how to learn from
difficulties.
In conclusion, we now realize the
importance of education. With knowledge, we will have a bright future, and we
will find ways to overcome difficulties.
Hi Vincent, my name is Kedeshia. I am a peer tutor in Prof. Coopers' ENG220. I would like to start of by saying your introduction is good. You provided enough information about the article, I was able to have an understanding of what it's about. Your second paragraph should be longer or connect it with your third paragraph to introduce your supporting details on your opinion. The evidence provided are pretty strong. However, in your fourth paragraph, you went off track. You quoted what a wise man said and based most of that paragraph on the quote, rather than explaining how education gains our soul. You provided examples on gaining soul, but nothing in relations to education. Overall, you provided good ideas to make a strong statement. Thank you for posting your blog.
ReplyDeleteHi Kedeshia, thanks for your response to my essay. yes I realized where my problem is in fourth paragraph. I did run off my topic, I will revise it. Thank you.
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